When it seems all hope is faded, gone,
We must make up our minds to carry on,
As heart beats ever steady as a drum,
As doting doe spurs on her newborn fawn.
For hope’s seeming fade may not be true;
It might be only sent to make you blue.
Your heart deserves cake, not just a crumb.
Hope doesn’t come from, but abides in you.
So this is my take on Jenna’s (revivedwriter) really cool challenge poem, called “Finish This Poem.” This is part of Jilly’s September Casting Bricks Challenge. Poets are posting half-poems, and other poets are taking a try at completing them. The trick is to be yourself but not lose the tone, voice, and intent of the initiator. Feeling brave? Come give it a go!
Particularly relevant in the midst of a hurricane!
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Everything seems to be. But thank you!
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Nice continuation of this. In particular I liked the last line about hope abiding in us.
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Thank you, Frank! It’s nice to have something to take my mind off of… um, whatever it was I wanted to take my mind off of.
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Been wondering how you folks are. Irma update was the first thing I checked this morning. What a relief to hear from you, chillin and poemin — a cake, not a crumb. 🙂
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Glad you liked that! Keep us in your thoughts; we’re not through it yet.
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Great collaboration! Love that last line.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome.
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Thank you for responding to my challenge! I like how you completed it and the message that hope is not gone, though it may sometimes seem to be.
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Remember that that “seems” is just a lie. It’s author is already doomed. I’m glad you liked my take.
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Ha-ha-ha-ha!!
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So now I read, since I finished Jenna’s Challenge this afternoon. (Posting tomorrow)
You kept her tone and mood so perfectly and I love the cake/crumb line; that’s beautiful!
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Thank you, Jill. I didn’t think a little biblical allusion would spoil the stew.
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