Renga – “Road of Ashes” Charley/qbit

qbit has taken up this crazy challenge!  I will update our ongoing collaboration through 10 couplets.  Stop by and see what insanity he & I cook up!  If you are interested in joining in, stop by the original post for On the Road of Ashes and let me know!  This is a part of the September Challenge of Casting Bricks; join us!  (plagiarized from Jilly’s blog almost verbatim)

I was on the way, on the way
and suddenly, precipitously, I wasn’t

Tourmaline voices cracked like stones in a fire
Broke my path wide into rust or grey choices

To labor as herdsman over sheep seeking knowledge
or waste my life recumbent on a hammock

Such are the sheep of Yeats
The best lack all conviction, while the worst

Cry out agonies in languages better gauged
to bear pain than in lingua hominibus

Vulgate promises
That will not redeem

Poets and educators study
apocryphal prophecies, end-times data chats

Revelations recursed through paths
Of unstable destination

Fire cracked through the Tourmaline
path broke wide with several choices

Flame buoyant, boreal –
The shattered colors of the compass

 

Woohoo!  We did it!

 

67 thoughts on “Renga – “Road of Ashes” Charley/qbit

  1. Astounding writing! More allusions than I can count (admire that part the most)! This is not for the faint of heart; it is, instead, what happens when intellectuals collaborate. This gets my vote for the Casting Bricks Literary Award… if we had one, of course. 🙂

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    • So you received the link to the text, then. I saw you asked for it from qbit. We had a ball (or I did) writing this. I think everyone should try one or more of the challenges on Jilly’s site. It stretches us as poets (and I’m resisting the urge to write, “I’m Gumby, dammit!”) Thank you for your comments!

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