Sonnet: No Great Shake I — a poem

Since I am tasked to write in metered time,
And since I never learned to accents place
This task is burden troth and hardly kind
Seems easy but reality bears out
Tis true that poets great can easy count
A word as beaten hard which part it has
The point accented that makes two its feet
But my left footed dance with words trips hard
Not men like Fred Astaire or Kelly might
The book helpful most for a meter form
Symbols has I did not learn, in school in truth
They are but rare, odd shapes that figure not
Desire to learn meter, I burn with shame
My mind hears not the clear rhythmic heartbeat

dVerse — Poets Pub:Meter-Made Mood – dVerse Meeting the Bar
Tonight we are challenged to match poetic meter with mood/tone.
It’s not playing to my strong suit, but join us anyway!
https://dversepoets.com/2016/06/16/meter-made-mood-dverse-meeting-the-bar/

Okay, since posting this I have been informed that Sonnets, technically, should rhyme.  I was so busy keeping track of the meter that… well, I don’t do math and poetry simultaneously!  Make up my mind; counting stressed syllables or over-stressed poets!  Sheesh!

(Technically, this qualifies as a blank-verse sonnet. Not every sonnet rhymes… or follows “the rules.”)

56 thoughts on “Sonnet: No Great Shake I — a poem

  1. Oh you make me feel so cruel and guilty…but look what you did with it! Perfect meter, so no more excuses. Great treatment of the poem and it gave me a good smile, so I’d say the mood is happy in spite of the topic.

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  2. Love it! Ah that we could all be the Fred Astaire and Gene Kelly of poetry in the masterful capturing of meter in our words, as they did rhythm in their feet! And always rememter that Ginger Rogers did everything Fred Astaire did, in high heels and backwards! 🙂

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    • Well, there is that one little movie where Astair and Rogers exchanged clothes and roles. (I’m lying; it never happened!) Thank you for enjoying what comes from an over-stressed mind and an undisciplined pen!

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  3. This resonates loudly for me Charley. Old fashion poetry frms are a struggle for me as well. I don’t think poetry in a structured form. I am free verse minimalist by nature, sometimes including rhyme – have been for many years. i enjoyed your take here… 🙂

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    • I, too, lean toward free (although can anything truly be said to be free?) verse. But the exercise of form is — and many will argue with me — a painful, excruciating form of torture that brings a poet to a greater love of words and greater avenues of expression in free verse. It also adds to the form of commerce variously known as psychology, therapy, and committal. 🙂

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      • Committed is right! That’s funny Charley. Wrting structured poetry can be excruciating. I gave Jilly’s enjambment a try. (I think Citracel is good for enjamdment) I just wrote a second fantasy sonnet to try it out. I just posted it and it may be the only enjambment sonnet I ever write? 🙂

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      • Ah, but now I fall back upon an old saw, tried and true… whatever doesn’t kill us… makes us bitter and jaded (actually, the one I carry from my Norse heritage is more telling: Whatever doesn’t kill me… had better start running). I reserve the Citracel for those who approach me with discussions of politics (the Joker, played by Jack Nicholson, had a point when, responding to the state of affairs both Democrat and Republican, uttered, “What this place needs is an enema!”). For poetics, I prefer a good red.

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